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Jeremiah Williams shot with one second left and missed. Everybody hated him he was a B team player who subbed in because the A team star was injured. He was their worst player. The next day at school people laughed at him and threw food at him in the lunch room. He went home crying. His mom told him she just got a new job and they were going to have to move. It was a new chance for him to start over. He bought new clothes and got a hair cut. He was really excited. Since basketball season just got over he had a lot of time to practice. On his first day of school he made pretty popular friends. The next week end they invited him to their house. He had a lot of fun. Everyday after school he would shoot hoop and dribbling. He also started lifting weights. When basketball season started a lot of people went out for it. A lot of them were really good, but Jerimiha had confidence he was going to be the best. In practice the coach was really impressed by him. Jerimha made A team at the shooting guard. He became really popular and met a girl he liked. He hung out with her for awhile and decided to ask her on a date. The next day at practice he felt really good about himself and did really good. As the season started they lost their first game and he was mad and in courage him to work harder. The next game was against his former school. He scored 16 points and had 12 assists. His team won 52 to 39. They made the playoffs ending their season with 18 wins and 2 loses. They mad it to the Championship game and it was against and undeafted team. Jerimiha had to guard the best player. At the end of the first quarter Jerimiha’s team was losing 23 to 14. Nobody on his team was doing well. And after the end of the second quarter the were losing 33 to 21. Jerimiha knew he had to hurry up and make a difference and at the end of the third quarter he had 12 points and 7 assists. They were still losing 46 to 38 but Jerimiha had confidence that they were going to win. As he stepped on to the court for the fourth quarter he had a feeling in his gut that he was going to do something great. They came back and were only down by 2 with 2.3 seconds left it was enough time to pass and shoot. Jerimiha’s team had the ball. They passed it to the point guard and he passed it straight to Jerimiha he shot at the buzzer and drilled it. He was a hero. Everybody charged the court. After he graduated the school made a plaque with his name on it and hung it in the gym. Nobody will forget what Jerimiha did for his school.

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This I believe

I believe in having skill. Everyone in the world has a little bit of skill, but probably not as much skill as me. Skill takes practice and skill. One time when I was a kid, Michael Jordan challenged me to a one on one game of basketball. I beat him 11 to 2, but his friends Kobe Bryant and Lebron James came over and Michael told him he won. Then I challenged all three of them and I beat them 11 to 6. They were really amazed by my skill and told many people that I was really bad because they were jealous. It also takes skill because when being smart. I get 100 percent on everything I do. I think it is important to have skill because if you have skill you will be successful. Success is very important and is the key to a great future. The only way you can fail is if you don’t have any skill. If you already failed you can practice and get skill to be successful. If you already have skill and you are successful you need to keep working to be the best. If you are the best then you need to work to stay the best. Therefore, everybody needs skill to be successful. You need skill in everything you do. You need it to be a good person and good at anything you want to be good at. The more skill you have the more successful you are. Everyone can be successful as long as the work hard to get skill. I work hard to get skill and that’s why I beat Michael, Kobe, and Lebron. I used to be nothing but I have taken the time to get skill so that I could be successful and do my best. It takes a long time to be the best. I just didn’t wake up with a lot of skill I just worked harder than my opponents.